Hi,


I will be graduating this December and have began interviewing with a few companies. There is a career fair this coming Tuesday at my school and I would like to have a presentable resume to handout. 


I would sincerely appreciate any and all feedback regarding my resume. 


Thank you!

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2 months ago

Hey there - 


Thanks for sharing your resume with us! A few things:


1. I dislike the grey bar at the top. I'm not sure it adds much beside some stylistic flair, but I'd rather you spend more time on your responsibilities and accomplishments in other sections instead.


2. Experience section: I'm a big fan of bullet points to show breaks in responsibilities. Remember, it's all about making it as easy as possible for your reader to know all the awesome things you've done. 


3. Depending on what job you're applying for, you should consider adding more skills. If it's not listed on your resume, they'll assume you don't have that skill even if it's an obvious one you definitely have. So put your social media, marketing, writing, computer skills, etc. all down there. You can even go with a 3 or 4 column grid if you need more space.


Those are just a few quick things I noticed, but I appreciate you sharing your resume and asking for feedback so I went ahead and made you your own unique link for my class "How to get a Six-Figure Salary in 4 Years: Part 1". If you use this link, you'll be able to get the class for free: https://www.udemy.com/how-to-get-a-six-figure-salary-in-4-years-part-1/?couponCode=ASHLEY


Best of luck and I hope the class helps. 

2 months ago

Hi Chris,


Thank you so much for all of your feedback it was extremely helpful. I just uploaded a photo of the improved version. Per your suggestions, I eliminated the grey bar, added bullets to make my responsibilities a bit clearer and added more skills. 


I have a few questions: 


1. Are there any skills that you think I should eliminate?

2. Do you feel that the layout is better or that it makes things unclear? 

3. Do you think my content is relevant?

3. What do you think I could do to improve my resume? 


Thank you so much!


-Ashley

2 months ago

This is a good start. A few more thoughts:


1.Achievements should be under the job in which you achieved that accomplishment. It's hard to know where and when you exceeded company goals by 20-30%. Place it closer to the job it refers to 


2. Your objective and your experience tell me you'd be a great fit for a retail supervisor at a brick and mortar store. If that's what you're looking for, you're in good shape. But, if you're looking for other roles--e.g. Public Relations, Marketing, Merchandising, etc--then you should refresh your objective to match the job you're looking for. Specifically, you say your objective is to "obtain a management position", but since you're fresh out of college, it's unlikely you'll get a Marketing Manager or Public Relations Manager position right away. Instead, you'll need to level up as an Associate or an Assistant first. Think about what jobs you're interested in and then adapt your Objective and your Skills for those jobs. 


3. If you take a look at the Udemy class I shared, you'll see that I'm a huge fan of real numbers to flesh out your resume and provide more context for your reader. When you write "Managed retail staff", I only get the "what" you did but not much else. Instead, write your bullet points with an emphasis on specific, measurable, and result-oriented information. So you could change what you have to "Trained,  managed, and mentored a retail staff of 3 full-time and 2 part-time employees, resulting in one of the lowest employee turnover rates for Kenneth Cole retailers in the area."

2 months ago

Thank you so much for your feedback. I personally do not want to go back into a brick and mortar store. I have been interviewing for tech recruiting companies, financial advising companies, and insurance companies. Does this revision make my objectives more clear? Should I completely eliminate the word "management"? I'm not sure if it comes across as overly ambitious.


I am currently viewing your Udemy class. It is very helpful. 

2 months ago

Hey Ashley - 


Yes these new edits are much better! I think we could do some fine tuning on your skills to make them a bit more personalized (e.g. you don't get much value including things like "Teamwork" and "Leadership" without concrete examples so they just take up space). 


I would suggest using this resume and start applying for jobs for two weeks and see if you get any phone interviews. If you do, great! If not, go back and keep tweaking your resume until you find a version that gets you to the phone screen.


Best of luck!

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